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Discuss both views CrimeGovernmentSociety Essay #491
Writing Task 2

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic:

There seems to be an increasing number of serious crimes committed each year. While some think the best way is to use the death penalty as a deterrent, many people believe that other measures will be needed.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

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273 words · 4 paragraphs
Introduction

Introduces the debate regarding increasing serious crimes and the methods to address them (death penalty vs. other measures). States the author's opinion favouring other methods.

In the face of escalating serious crimes, some individuals advocate for the death penalty as a deterrent, while others argue for alternative measures. I align myself with the latter perspective, proposing that other strategies may prove more effective.

Body 1 · View 1

Discusses the view supporting the death penalty, presenting arguments for deterrence and justice/closure, while also providing counter-arguments against these points.

Those championing the death penalty as a deterrent have their reasons. Firstly, they contend that the fear of death is universal, and thus, the death penalty, being the ultimate punishment, would deter potential criminals. This argument, while seemingly logical, hinges on the assumption that all criminals are rational actors, which is not always the case. Secondly, proponents argue that the death penalty serves as retribution, providing closure for victims' families. This point, though emotionally compelling, overlooks the possibility that the quest for revenge may perpetuate a cycle of violence.

Body 2 · View 2

Discusses the view supporting alternative methods, focusing on rehabilitation (with example of Norway) and crime prevention strategies (education/social services with example), arguing for their effectiveness.

Despite these points, I find the arguments for alternative measures more persuasive. One such measure is rehabilitation, which aims to reform offenders rather than merely punishing them. For instance, in Norway, the focus on rehabilitation over retribution has resulted in one of the world's lowest recidivism rates, demonstrating its effectiveness. Another measure is the implementation of more robust crime prevention strategies, such as improved education and social services. These strategies tackle the root causes of crime, thereby reducing its prevalence. For example, studies have shown that areas with better educational opportunities and social services have lower crime rates, underscoring the potential of these preventative measures.

Conclusion

Summarizes the main points regarding the death penalty vs. alternatives and reiterates the author's stance that alternative methods (rehabilitation, prevention) are more effective and humane.

In conclusion, while the death penalty has its advocates and certain arguments in its favour, I believe that alternative measures, namely rehabilitation and robust crime prevention strategies, present a stronger and more humane solution to the problem of escalating serious crimes.

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